Who wants to collab on/finish a poem I wrote?

[EnigmaTico]

Since the release of VBBOTG, I've noticed that a lot of us developed a deeper appreciation for poetry so I figured it'd be fun if we worked on a poem together about America. Thoughts?

[Miss Doing Nothing]

I like it i think you can just say finger unless it’s some other finger then the one you always point towards something?

[EnigmaTico]

I like it i think you can just say finger unless it’s some other finger then the one you always point towards something?

Haha good point. I guess including index does make it a bit redundant huh    Thanks for the suggestion. Any suggestions for the next couple lines though?

[Miss Doing Nothing]

Haha good point. I guess including index does make it a bit redundant huh Thanks for the suggestion. Any suggestions for the next couple lines though?

As much as I would like to help, I can’t come up with things about America : P

 

I thought about it and maybe something about China having the nectar and you as American citizen being the flowers. I have an other way of writing so it’s hard to make it the same way. I’m looking forward to what you come up with! Maybe let it rest for a while and revisit it when you feel inspired in this subject again !

[War In My Mind]

An image of America as the place where you can be whoever you want

hidden beneath is a system making it impossible unless you're already

rich and white

Where politicians are puppets of these men who control the wellbeing of a nation

All for a dollar

Where people don't vote within their best interests because they're being strung along by an evil

puppetmaster

Every day a reminder that the American dream is just that--a dream.