love deluxe 8,862 Posted March 3, 2023 i love to write in my free time and i have no idea if this would be the right place to post this (mods feel free to move it if you want!) but i thought it would be fun if i could dump some of my writings here and get feedback from fellow poetry/songwriting enthusiasts! also feel free to post your own writing here!!! 3 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
love deluxe 8,862 Posted March 3, 2023 VHS PRINCESS this place is a ghost town without you here tv on in the background drowning out the fear going to video palace back when that was a thing this guy has his hazard lights on and i wonder if he knows that i’m drunk every word flowing out of my mouth and spoken with his silver tongue but lately ive been getting back on my meds rearranging my bedroom, reconnecting with my old friends telling stories to them they can’t believe about that time that i was too high to breathe leave me in peace, i can’t get you out of my head lived there so long, its time you start paying rent cause it was my choice to give my body up to a man like you cause i didn’t give a fuck and you don’t either stop acting like you do cause you only want me if there’s sex in it for you take my clothes off like its christmas i know im top of your wishlist then when i look into the mirror after we fuck in your truck i can see clear i just want attention from someone and all you ever wanted was to coming up next on the tv everything everyone says about me that i look like im from the movies that i make love like its my destiny but i want back what i can’t have my innocence playing freeze tag with my guard down touch my heart now your ignorance always wins somehow did you ever think i was any thing other than just your baby got me crying feel like i can’t speak instill the fear and desert me fuck me on the floor of our hometown hotel unlike snow white looking through a wishing well i have but one song and it’s not yours to tell cause it’s my story and it’s mine to selling myself to jesus at offering looking back i fear i was haunting the wrong house the wrong school the wrong street hang me on the cross like an art piece 7 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
DCooper 37,180 Posted March 3, 2023 @love deluxe I really like it! I went to reply to your question earlier but it was gone haha. I think it's very evocative and I see the Lana inspiration 2 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
love deluxe 8,862 Posted March 3, 2023 1 hour ago, DCooper said: @love deluxe I really like it! I went to reply to your question earlier but it was gone haha. I think it's very evocative and I see the Lana inspiration thank you smmm i was inspired after listening to a&w for the first time and was like- i have to jot what i’m feeling down right now haha 2 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
love deluxe 8,862 Posted March 14, 2023 Cutest Kids in the Coffee Shop how long have you been standing in the back silently staring at me like an art piece tattooed on me when our eyes meet hear my heartbeat crying out for your hands to just move a little closer and we can’t deny the space between us let’s just pretend that it’s easy cause i don’t know if what you’re saying is what i want to hear don’t know if the game youre playing is worth the tears but when you say that we’re the cutest kids in the coffee shop i don’t care if it’s wrong and ill never stop been this way since i was young staying after class for an older someone maybe it’s just living in a small town got me finding whoevers around so im looking for trouble in places so strange and id rather be caught dead than caught here with you all up on me 1 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
love deluxe 8,862 Posted April 5, 2023 you know you won me over run your hands over me like i was made of water like i ain’t got air to breathe im not the best at much but you tell me otherwise if only you knew why i hesitate to open up my mind don’t you think twice when i get shy when you try to talk to me? look me in the eye and tell me that you know who i can be? you saw me when i only saw what other people see just me, but baby you saw me for me holding your stare on lockdown like you swear i can feel you there you’re so debonair but if i declare my thoughts will you still care, babe? i don’t mind just look into my eyes and if you tell me lies i swear that i’ll be fine you know you got me dancing around in all my dreams do i just solve the problem or give into me? waiting for your headlights to pass around my way in the darkest night i know that you still recognize my face don’t you see my shining silhouette standing on second street? pondering if this place is just where im meant to be? i think that i love you but ill never let you see cause, baby you and me we’re not meant to be holding my stare on lockdown like i swear i still feel you there you’re so debonair but if i declare my thoughts would you still care, babe? i can hear the bells like magic got me under your spell feeling unwell baby cant you tell know full well that i would go to hell for you i don’t mind just look into my eyes and if you tell me lies i swear that i’ll be fine i dont wanna be friends want you to be obsessed can’t deal with second best im not like all the rest, cause you know you won me over run your hands over me like i was made of water like i ain’t got air to breathe 0 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
