Elle 121,283 Posted April 11, 2020 (edited) Written Version You move like water sweet baby sweet waiter making the night smile to no one you cater silent wood worker from midnight till later my lover my laughter my armor my maker The way that i feel with you is something like aching a universe hung like a mobile the alignment of these planets unique in me the earth moves around the sun no land all sea water world sun chaser tropic of cancer southern equater i'm the crying crustacean sunbathing on paper moon. Let's rewrite the beginning of this primordial ooze shall we my love Am i being brazen for saying this year makes me feel like we could've wrote it better than him? But who am i just a girl in love dreaming in paper rearranging the salt for the pepper in love with you my quiet waiter Summer blue forever call me when you're done with work i'll pick you up later the darker the better five after midnight the darker the better --- Spoken Word Version You move like water, sweet baby, sweet waiter Making the night smile, to no one you cater Silent wood worker, from midnight 'til later My lover, my laughter, my armor, my maker The way that I feel with you is something like aching Inside of my stomach, the cosmos are baking The universe hung like a mobile The alignments of these planets unique In me the earth moves around the sun No land all sea Water world Sun chaser Tropic of cancer Southern equater I'm the crying crustacean Sunbathing on paper Moon. Let's rewrite the beginning of this primordial ooze Shall we, my love? Am I being brazen for saying this year makes me feel like we could've wrote it better than him? But who am I Just a girl in love dreaming on paper Rearranging the salt for the pepper In love with you My quiet waiter Summer Blue Dorever Call me when you're done with work I'll pick you up later The darker the better Edited July 28, 2020 by Elle updated with spoken word version 4 Quote • 4.18.14 • 5.1.14 • 9.20.14 • 5.28.15 • 6.14.15 • 7.28.16 • 7.24.17 • 10.23.17 • 10.24.17 • 1.25.18 • 2.5.18 • 12.5.18 • 10.3.19 • 10.11.19 • 11.16.19 • SF • ATL • ATL • IND • ATL • CHI • LDN • NYC • NYC • DC • ATL • NYC • PDX • SAN • KS Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
maxthehitman 1,729 Posted April 11, 2020 I like this poem Surely this is a LOVE Poem, about a torrid love affair. About who?I do not know, someone only SHE knows of. We shall wait for a name to be added to the pages of her poem. It could be about ME 0 Quote - Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Liz Taylor Blues 18,738 Posted April 11, 2020 I. Am. Shooketh 0 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
slang 1,532 Posted April 14, 2020 You move like water sweet baby sweet waiter making the night smile to no one you cater silent wood worker from midnight till later my lover my laughter my armor my maker The way that i feel with you is something like aching a universe hung like a mobile the alignment of these planets unique in me the earth moves around the sun one of my favorite lines:"inside of my stomach the cosmos are baking", is currently left out of the text transcription (after "something like aching"). This is a nice poem. It's either very deep or very shallow (kind of an LDR modus-operandi thing). Also I suppose "crying crustaceon", as being LDR, is now pretty comprehensible, given her recent astrological sign-change from gemini to cancer. 0 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
PARADIXO 32,940 Posted April 14, 2020 Possible my favorite poem of hers It still bugs me though, as @@evilentity noted, the incorrect plural "cosmos". This is a nice poem. It's either very deep or very shallow (kind of an LDR modus-operandi thing). Also I suppose "crying crustaceon", as being LDR, is now pretty comprehensible, given her recent astrological sign-change from gemini to cancer. Yeah definitely. This whole part: in me the earth moves around the sun no land all sea water world sun chaser tropic of cancer southern equater i'm the crying crustacean is her referring her Leo Mooon and Cancer Sun. 1 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
lanasgirl 3,800 Posted July 28, 2020 But who am I Just a girl in love dreaming on paper Rearranging the salt for the pepper In love with you My quiet waiter I love this so much 0 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dominikx4 25,408 Posted August 31, 2020 yuh yuh i think this is my favorite poem on Violet the music, the writing... everything 0 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
