Random Lana Discussion Thread

[anwdelrey 8,964]

“As a music critic and a person with common sense” KDJDJKSDJFR

[anwdelrey 8,964]

7 minutes ago, kraljicabenzinske said:

i'm an english graduate so imma give you a few pointers on academic writing (i can't sleep and got nothing better to do)

i'm writing this to genuinely help you with your course, not to make fun of you or anything

who? name a media outlet or a critic who has accused the title track; if your essay is based on opposing these allegations, you must be more clear on who has made these allegations and for which reason. "many people" doesn't tell the reader anything. you need specific examples (which is the reoccurring issue in the essay)

absolutely not. your argument in an essay cannot be that you have common sense. delete. your viewpoint needs to be supported by factual arguments and evidence, it can't be "just trust me bro"

i love how you say this and then proceed to provide no background for the song at all the background would provide us with info about the era of her career and the topics she dealt with at that time of the song release, other related media such as the song's music video and other songs from the album and her opus that are correlated to lana's songwriting in Ultraviolence, and then more specific who is she singing about in the song etc.

you cannot analyze a lyrics and not provide any examples. You should have copied a few lines and said "in this line it's evident that she' talking about this and that." you need to imagine that this is going to be read by someone who never heard the song so all this would mean nothing to an average reader (and that's one of the important aspects of academic writing when it comes to topics like this - you always have to assume the reader does not know anything about the matter, in other words, you need to spell everything out and be as specific as possible) . For example, Lana Del Rey opens the song by saying that her lover used to call her a deadly nightshade. This implies this and that (and in this part you argue how this line supports you view)... I know this sound very dumbed-down, but this is an academic way of presenting information. evidence (example) spelled out + analysis

the part with "they serve as a cautionary tale" is very interesting and i wish you actually showed us how exactly and in which lines is the song a cautionary tale. that would have been an amazing argument, i love the expression cautionary tale, great job with that

girl what is the message? you mention it twice and you're defending the message without even telling us what is the message of the song

 

you could have gone so much deeper into explaining how does the song not romanticize abuse and toxic relationships. even to me it's unclear how exactly how argued that it does not. because you basically expressed you general opinion and the feeling you get when you listen to the song, but you didn't make any strong arguments. in which part of the song or in which line can we see that Lana's not romanticizing abuse? How can you prove that she's singing from a perspective of someone who's aware of the danger of toxic love and not from the perspective of someone who's lost in it or enjoying it?

no shade to lana, but how? again, you need to prove this. how does the lyrical style show her talent? what lyrical devices did she use? what words or lines can be felt strongly by the listener and why? what about storytelling?

 

in conclusion, you have a great way with words and it all looks nice. I have zero notes for the language and writing style, A+  for that. however, the content is an issue. you need to be so much more specific. provide examples, have clear arguments, go into depth and take us there. your essay is very very general, very subjective, and it doesn't say too much of something specific and it doesn't really help the reader learn something new or make him/her think about the topic

Oh you’re sick. I’m actually laughing y’all are so mean.

[kraljicabenzinske 11,122]

4 minutes ago, anwdelrey said:

Oh you’re sick. I’m actually laughing y’all are so mean.

no but i'm genuinely trying to help and give him advice on how to improve the article from academic point of view  i've been doing academic writing for 5 years now and that's how I'd improve it based on my experience and knowledge

 

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alright i went ahead and moved the thread to the random lana discussion thread. let’s be nice everyone! 

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49 minutes ago, kraljicabenzinske said:

i'm an english graduate so imma give you a few pointers on academic writing (i can't sleep and got nothing better to do)

i'm writing this to genuinely help you with your course, not to make fun of you or anything

who? name a media outlet or a critic who has accused the title track; if your essay is based on opposing these allegations, you must be more clear on who has made these allegations and for which reason. "many people" doesn't tell the reader anything. you need specific examples (which is the reoccurring issue in the essay)

absolutely not. your argument in an essay cannot be that you have common sense. delete. your viewpoint needs to be supported by factual arguments and evidence, it can't be "just trust me bro"

i love how you say this and then proceed to provide no background for the song at all the background would provide us with info about the era of her career and the topics she dealt with at that time of the song release, other related media such as the song's music video and other songs from the album and her opus that are correlated to lana's songwriting in Ultraviolence, and then more specific who is she singing about in the song etc.

you cannot analyze a lyrics and not provide any examples. You should have copied a few lines and said "in this line it's evident that she' talking about this and that." you need to imagine that this is going to be read by someone who never heard the song so all this would mean nothing to an average reader (and that's one of the important aspects of academic writing when it comes to topics like this - you always have to assume the reader does not know anything about the matter, in other words, you need to spell everything out and be as specific as possible) . For example, Lana Del Rey opens the song by saying that her lover used to call her a deadly nightshade. This implies this and that (and in this part you argue how this line supports you view)... I know this sound very dumbed-down, but this is an academic way of presenting information. evidence (example) spelled out + analysis

the part with "they serve as a cautionary tale" is very interesting and i wish you actually showed us how exactly and in which lines is the song a cautionary tale. that would have been an amazing argument, i love the expression cautionary tale, great job with that

girl what is the message? you mention it twice and you're defending the message without even telling us what is the message of the song

 

you could have gone so much deeper into explaining how does the song not romanticize abuse and toxic relationships. even to me it's unclear how exactly how argued that it does not. because you basically expressed you general opinion and the feeling you get when you listen to the song, but you didn't make any strong arguments. in which part of the song or in which line can we see that Lana's not romanticizing abuse? How can you prove that she's singing from a perspective of someone who's aware of the danger of toxic love and not from the perspective of someone who's lost in it or enjoying it?

no shade to lana, but how? again, you need to prove this. how does the lyrical style show her talent? what lyrical devices did she use? what words or lines can be felt strongly by the listener and why? what about storytelling?

 

in conclusion, you have a great way with words and it all looks nice. I have zero notes for the language and writing style, A+  for that. however, the content is an issue. you need to be so much more specific. provide examples, have clear arguments, go into depth and take us there. your essay is very very general, very subjective, and it doesn't say too much of something specific and it doesn't really help the reader learn something new or make him/her think about the topic

IM ROTF 😭😭😭😭😭

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3 minutes ago, cinnamongirI said:

alright i went ahead and moved the thread to the random lana discussion thread. let’s be nice everyone! 

 

I- the random lana discussion thread has a new title now LMAO

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1 minute ago, Psychedelic Pussy said:

 

I- the random lana discussion thread has a new title now LMAO

ugh i know  Hold on one sec

okay there we go.. not doing that again

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we’re on page 666… 

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49 minutes ago, kraljicabenzinske said:

no but i'm genuinely trying to help and give him advice on how to improve the article from academic point of view  i've been doing academic writing for 5 years now and that's how I'd improve it based on my experience and knowledge

 

honestly I didn’t major in English but everything you said was on point. That’s why I asked if it was for a college course. It didn’t go deep enough in its analysis. Also the thesis was weak in my opinion. The intro “paragraph” did not make the crux of the argument explicitly clear and detailed, which is why the body also suffered from vagueness. 

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5 minutes ago, terrencelovesy0u said:

we’re on page 666… 

 

It's time to summon Asmodeous. 

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2 hours ago, kraljicabenzinske said:

i'm an english graduate so imma give you a few pointers on academic writing (i can't sleep and got nothing better to do)

i'm writing this to genuinely help you with your course, not to make fun of you or anything

who? name a media outlet or a critic who has accused the title track; if your essay is based on opposing these allegations, you must be more clear on who has made these allegations and for which reason. "many people" doesn't tell the reader anything. you need specific examples (which is the reoccurring issue in the essay)

absolutely not. your argument in an essay cannot be that you have common sense. delete. your viewpoint needs to be supported by factual arguments and evidence, it can't be "just trust me bro"

i love how you say this and then proceed to provide no background for the song at all the background would provide us with info about the era of her career and the topics she dealt with at that time of the song release, other related media such as the song's music video and other songs from the album and her opus that are correlated to lana's songwriting in Ultraviolence, and then more specific who is she singing about in the song etc.

you cannot analyze a lyrics and not provide any examples. You should have copied a few lines and said "in this line it's evident that she' talking about this and that." you need to imagine that this is going to be read by someone who never heard the song so all this would mean nothing to an average reader (and that's one of the important aspects of academic writing when it comes to topics like this - you always have to assume the reader does not know anything about the matter, in other words, you need to spell everything out and be as specific as possible) . For example, Lana Del Rey opens the song by saying that her lover used to call her a deadly nightshade. This implies this and that (and in this part you argue how this line supports you view)... I know this sound very dumbed-down, but this is an academic way of presenting information. evidence (example) spelled out + analysis

the part with "they serve as a cautionary tale" is very interesting and i wish you actually showed us how exactly and in which lines is the song a cautionary tale. that would have been an amazing argument, i love the expression cautionary tale, great job with that

girl what is the message? you mention it twice and you're defending the message without even telling us what is the message of the song

 

you could have gone so much deeper into explaining how does the song not romanticize abuse and toxic relationships. even to me it's unclear how exactly how argued that it does not. because you basically expressed you general opinion and the feeling you get when you listen to the song, but you didn't make any strong arguments. in which part of the song or in which line can we see that Lana's not romanticizing abuse? How can you prove that she's singing from a perspective of someone who's aware of the danger of toxic love and not from the perspective of someone who's lost in it or enjoying it?

no shade to lana, but how? again, you need to prove this. how does the lyrical style show her talent? what lyrical devices did she use? what words or lines can be felt strongly by the listener and why? what about storytelling?

 

in conclusion, you have a great way with words and it all looks nice. I have zero notes for the language and writing style, A+  for that. however, the content is an issue. you need to be so much more specific. provide examples, have clear arguments, go into depth and take us there. your essay is very very general, very subjective, and it doesn't say too much of something specific and it doesn't really help the reader learn something new or make him/her think about the topic

I AM CRYING LAUGHING. ur my new fav user on all of LB 

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1 minute ago, 111 said:

 

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